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famousamos 2008-10-02 ch 24,	abuseLiked it. Think that you need to get back to the keepers or show how Alaysia fits in with the story. other than that, the story is good so far. I would like to see you post more chapters faster, but that is the way things go.
arcus acer 2008-09-18 ch 24,	abuseNice chapter, liked it a lot. Given I may be a little biased in that view though ^_^
Megamickel 2008-09-17 ch 24,	abuseHo wow, I had forgotten about this story. Understand about not being able to update - this damned music theory degree is a LOT harder to get than you might think, let alone the practice.
Soulweaver666 2008-05-31 ch 23,	abuseGreat length, I loved the combat scenes and hopefully you will make more chapters quicker as it is... summer!
Zane Fleia 2008-05-30 ch 23,	abuseO, very cool. Love it. Yay, two years of Twilight!
Dennis N. Santana 2008-05-07 ch 1,	abuseRead it all now. I can see that your writing has greatly improved. The prose is more developed, the dialogue feels smoother and conveys more personality, and the few combats are much more immersing. I felt however that it languished far too much at the beginning. Character development is good, yes, but at times Eva and Arrathir were just cringe-inducing, and didn't seem to progress a whole lot despite themselves. Normally, this wouldn't matter, you could take your time, I certainly do – but you had already set a pace and tone for your stories previously, which developed some expectations that the sudden, new direction seemed to shatter. The change should have been more gradual and the development a bit more subtle than "Get problems; then work them out NOW." I don't mind, to be honest, I've seen FAR worse, but speaking as a constructive critic, that kind of shift is jarring to a committed audience. I thought you could have condensed some of that early interaction and not lost much, and kept the sharp, almost thriller-esque pace that you had beforehand which attracted your readers. Beside certain pacing issues, everything else is pretty improved over how it was before (in The Awakening, I mean). Congratulations! You seemed to have stalled hard now, but maybe my advice will help you in future endeavors. Also I hope this doesn't anger your fanbase, they don't seem to like me a lot, but I consider you worth the time to have a nice and impersonal talk with, so yeah.
grayangle 2008-04-10 ch 22,	abuseMore please.
Snarkhunter42 2008-04-01 ch 22,	abuseARCUS! I'd like to do a little formula: Your story = Epic Your story -> Arcus Arcus = Win Therefore, we can re-write the above information as such: Your story + Arcus = Epic Win I hope this was very informative for all of you. ^_^ * * * * * All right, I think I'm beginning to see how this might just tie into everything. Still eager to get back to the main storyline, but if Arcus is going to be featured, I'm sure that I can wait just a bit longer... Keep it up!
Zane Fleia 2008-04-01 ch 22,	abuseARCUS! GLOMPS I think that made the chapter for me. XD
grayangle 2007-12-23 ch 21,	abuseI must say I am liking your Leonin arc you added to your story. Weather I would like it as much as a stand alone story I haven't figured out yet. Since it is in your story and most likely will link to the main arc sooner or later, it does makes a nice brake from the rest of the story though. More soon would be nice, please.
famousamos 2007-12-03 ch 21,	abuseBeen with you from the start with MTG vs. YGO. love this series and hope that many more like it come. Still am confused on how the leonin fits in with the story. hopefully it will be explained in the future.
Selendrile Alys 2007-12-02 ch 21,	abuseDo I really need to repeat what Zane said? Plus I don't mind sharing my acknowledge.
Zane Fleia 2007-12-01 ch 21,	abuseYay, new chappie~ Back to the random Leonin again. I can't complain, love Leonin. Rar, her dad's evil 'n stuff. ^_^
Megamickel 2007-10-12 ch 20,	abuseMeh. There was a spelling error or two in there.. too lazy and too busy to go point them out. Have to go move my truck over then after that I have to go get ready for football game. Meh. I dislike band. Anyways, keep 'em coming.
grayangle 2007-10-10 ch 20,	abuseThanks for the present. I always thought we had to get You something but if this is how you do it then it fine by me. I hope your birthday is filled with good friends and family. More please after you had a chance to rest up from your marry making.

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