oh
okay i get it now
thanks for the lil post it note
it really helped
but other than that it was really good
=D

Beautifully written. So evocotive. *sighs and rubs aching chest*

I understood what was happening without your authors note, but it was nice to read it and to get your perspective and motivation. The intention of the author is so often misunderstood, sometimes in a good way I'll admit, but here it would be a tragedy to miss the subtext you so artfully developed.

Much appreciation for sharing this little gem :)

I really like this. I think your style of writng really works well for this peice. The "scrambled her DNA like it was for breakfast" is great and "She was the books she carried, born and raised in the back corners of a library, bound together by a leather spine, hidden between two, quite ordinary looking, covers." is amazing.

It remind me of the Ani Difranco song Pulse. heres a link

that was, interesting... to say the least. I've never read anything like it, so give yourself some points for creativity!

very good take on things...definatly a new spice in the hg/ss fan world! good job

alrite...i got it after u explained it in the end, and though u may not have portrayed lust (at least not to me, because i was shocked and disguested and i understood -somehow- that he loves her in dat dark sorta way) but i feel ur work is just beautiful. and u shudnt let anyone bring u down abt ur work. thank god u didnt. cos ur work is beautiful...its something ppl shud see...i think it'll take u places...and wow

Wonderfully written. What can I say? Amazing. It's definitely different and you captured the emotions perfectly. I almost cried.

I can't say that I like it...because I'm not sure I do. But I must say that I love the ways it's writen and the plot. It almost made me cry at the end. Very nice. Keep it up.

wow. Hm...what can I say? I liked it.

I like how you can actually WRITE. I like your style. I also like how you don't have grammatical errors. I think I found one somewhere, but that was it.

One of my favorite sentences: "She was the books she carried, born and raised in the back corners of a library, bound together by a leather spine, hidden between two, quite ordinary looking, covers."

I don't think it is necessary that the two characters be Severus and Hermione or that the story be Harry Potter related at all, but I'm glad you posted it here anyway so I could read it.

Wow. I'm completely speechless. Everything I have ever tried to show in my writing, you managed to tear out and lay bear for the reader to weep at...just wow. Can't wait to read more of your work.

It was beautiful. And sordid.

very nicely written

it was scary; but i should have been warned by the summary *sigh* i will never learn lolz

My god, what a writing style you have! Your words pulled me into the story and I couldn't let go until I had read every last one. Dark, yet a really fine piece of writing. Compliments!

This is beautiful. So sad, you really want him to be able to fix what was done to her but know it can't happen. This was wonderfully written, your attention to detail is great.