...That was very beautiful. I can piture Moe being so tender and gentle beneath all that crudeness and whatnot. His wife sounded lovely. :)

I really really loved this fanfic it would get a twelve outta a scale of ten!

It was good, as far as Simpsons fics go. (No insult intended- it's just hard to have a great story when you stay true to the series.)

Have you seen the movie Take the Lead? (It's based off of the same person as Mad Hot Ballroom.)

-Icelands

Your story, Mad Hot Moe, as it is is very compelling. (The title seems to parody something-am I wrong?) Your writing style is nothing short of superb and I thouroughly enjoyed the read. In fact, it has been a while since I've been able to read a Simpsons fanfiction in its longevity. And you show a tight grasp on vocabulary and grammatical knowledge which is a fresh breath of air from the sometimes elementary fanfiction that lurks this site.

I did, however, cringe a few times while reading your story. The entire relationship between Moe and Lynn felt extremely rushed. Only five chapters? Not nearly enough to develop out the two characters enough to begin to build some sort of common ground for the two to grow off of. Although, Moe is an already fleshed out character from the show's 20-something year run, I got no feeling for the character Lynn. Who was she? Why, being such the beautiful woman that she is, swoon over Moe the greasy bartender? Did she have any aspirations or past memories that may have pushed her towards marrying such a man?

Of course, I am not at all trying to detract from your superb story telling. If this is your first Simpsons fic, then it is a damn good one. Could do with a nice, shiny coat of varnish but in it's state now, is a great read.

4.23/5