How has this not gotten more reviews? This story was and still is beautifully written and incredibly addictive.

Wow. This, is really good. I like FalcoxLeon. It's a sweet kinda pairing. But you just totally flipped my mind's look on the pairing. There is quite a lot of angst and background history to these guys. And you completely showcased their flaws.

One word: beautiful. Keep writing! (*w*)b

Lucarioblaze

Goddamn, how you inspire me... .

Everyone here has practically voiced my thoughts, but damn.

I envy your skill.

-Flak

No lie.

When i was reading through the part about Gloria the song "Roxanne" by The Police was playing. I didn't notice it until they were signing the chorus "Roxanne . . . "

Really. Just sad. A sad, sad ending.

And I'm listening to Every Breath You Take by The Police, which is a sad song, in a way of sorts.

I almost teared up typing this and while reading that part with Gloria.

Well . . . live and let die, right? Time to move on, no matter how hard it is.

Okay.

So Leon did kill her, though technically she killed herself already.

So, does that mean that I lose all my chips?

Just let me know when you're done, okay?

I'm . . . done.

Okay.

Maybe it was the alcohol. (Drinking some Fat Tire as I type this)

I didn't want any distractions. (Too bad. Listening to Live and Let Die is quite the distraction as I'm typing this out.)

Well, Falco sure seems like an interesting fellow to know. Crazy when he fights and tender when he fucks.

Meh. You definitely went into a lot more detail with this one. You know, when I typed this shit out way back in my days of yore it felt so cheesy and stupid and yet here I am reading it and the sex scene doesn't seem that bad at all.

Weird.

Well, it's not cheesy so don't worry pal.

Just let me know when you're done, okay?

Well, Falco and Leon both finished at the same time.

Now ain't that just peachy?

Leon just waltzed on out of there.

Just peachy.

Weeeel, butter my butt and call me a biscuit but what the hell just happened?

Let's get this show on the road.

"Just let me know when you're done, okay?"

Well, you certainly didn't give Roger a stopping place.

"That was amazing."

Yes. Yes it was. A bit sick of me to enjoy this, right? Well, can't help myself if I enjoy some decent writing.

Shit. I've been holding out on myself for too long reading shit stories. I need to let myself relax and enjoy life at times too.

So once again this was good. Shit, you're own character couldn't have said it any better.

"That was amazing."

So, psychology is a joke? Or is therapy a joke?

Hmmm . . . I took psychology. It was okay. Really. It was. My teacher had a nice ass and I liked her. Not just because she had a nice ass. She had personality and flare. Something that most teachers didn't have.

Meh. Nice dialogue but I'm sure you're tired of hearing/reading that by now.

Not as dark but some action now. Well, Falco pecked the fucker's/Roger's eye out.

Hot damn. An eye for an eye, I suppose.

Hmmm . . . slowly getting darker and darker, the chapters.

Listening to Rush - 2112 (Priests of Syrinx) as I write this review.

Very exciting music that really doesn't suit the setting/mood that you've tried to set up.

And for that I must apologize.

So, suicide at the end or no?

Well, I'm all fresh out of chips. I might win back double the load if my bet is correct with Leon and Her.

Or I could lose big time like all those sorry sods in Las Vegas.

Just let me know when you're done, okay?

Halfway there.

Great.

Poetry, job bonuses, and ass beatings in one chapter. What isn't here that should be?

More information, that's what.

Sheesh. You just keep on slowly dragging out that crime that Leon committed. Just keep on dragging it out and never tell us.

God. I wonder what he did?

Well. He can't bring Her back. And her is Gloria. And that collie, Ethan, talks about the best of us getting mushy over that one person.

So . . . I see.

I go all in with my chips this time. I'm certain that Leon killed Her.

Just let me know when you're done, okay?

Getting there.

Well.

I was wrong and there goes a large portion of my chips.

Le sigh. This is what I get for gambling. Did I ever tell you about the time that I gambled on a cruise ship and won it big? Black Jack. Went from ten (10) dollars to over a hundred (100) and then I lost it all to a fucking slot machine.

Fucking slot machine. They just gobble up your money and spit out a few cents every now and then.

So, Gloria is the beaut's name, eh? Pretty nice description. Nothing too descriptive like those corny, cheesy porn stories that I happen to find every now and then, but nothing that just alludes to the action either.

Nice.

Just let me know when you're done, okay?

I've got seven more chapters to go, sheesh.

Hmmmm . . . So no hint as to who SHE is though I'm still betting the larger stack of my chips on HER. I'm sure you know who SHE is. It's HER. The big hype from all the later Star Fox games. Well, actually SHE was just a big hype from one Star Fox game and that didn't even sport a cannon story line.

Shit. I said too much.

Anyhow. So, apparently Falco has got the hots for Leon and vis versa.

Once again, I must commend you for your dialogue. I felt like I was sitting in a movie theater. Not to say that your dialogue was some cliche movie liners.

And we're walking, and walking.

Okay.

-Everything in prison is what is for a reason.-

Didn't make too much sense to me . . . or is that just me? But I could hint at what you were trying to say when I read the next paragraph.

Sergeant seems like a colorful fellow. Real dynamic and all that. Not dull at all. )

Can't bring her back?

I would immediately jump and say HER but I'm not too sure.

Let's read on, shall we?

I'm visiting this story because Jaslazul mentioned it to me (As in: Go read it now!)

So here I am and the dialogue seems straight forward and nice.

But I have a question. Why with the numerical values after you told us what they were?

I . . . am perplexed because I'm not sure why you would do that.

Nothing wrong with it, I suppose, but I'm just curious.

So, Falco is visiting Leon? The sadistic chameleon?

I'll read on and find out for myself.

This...story made me sad...but, it was a great read. There are very few stories of these two and many seem to view them as a sort of depressed couple. I like how you made this, though. I was sad at the end, but, either way it was good.