I enjoyed the concept of the story very much. I would like to ask the author to think a little more & run a spell checker over his/her work. It's easier to follow if you don't spend your time deciphering the story.

Hi.

I've read only the first few kbytes of your story. It has a good plot, and good ideas, but the grammar simply sucks. Please, use a spell checker, and review your text with care.

I'm waiting for the new and improved version! See ya.