I'm one of the Megaman fans,and I'm quite dissaponted that there are too many spelling errors. Guardings should be spelled as GUARDIANS,Fenif (Fefnir)and some punctuation marks is missing. E-mail me if you need help.Bye.

hi! First off, I want to say that I like the story, so don't get me wrong. I just want to add that most of your sentences are run-ons and that parts feel like you rushed and skipped or changed a letter. Other than that, I'd say that this fic is comming along well. keep up the good work!

and he said "let there be megaman shadow" and there was megaman shadow, i'm liking it so far, ah zero you never stay down reminds me of what dr. wily said in a comic "i never show love to my creations since i expect them to one day die and stay dead" zero must be a cat or something anyway can't wait for more chapters...but alas i must

Okay, let's see. I'm hoping that the plot heats up, it certainly caught my interest. I think you need a lot of work on your storying telling first though. Try to keep the tense in which you are writing consistant. Also watch out for spelling errors and the basic rules of grammer. Words that start with a vowel sounds should be preceeded by 'an' not 'a'. Also try to fill the story out a bit. Add descriptors and explain where in the world Roll came from. She seems like an unnecessary addition.