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| Lady Chitose 2006-12-08 ch 1,  | abuseThat was short but sweet, Akane. :3 The only thign I can really critique is that you seemed to mix past and present tense, which can get a bit confusing. Otherwise, good job. Yay for Ponyboy/Johnny slash. ^^ |
| Flag 2006-07-31 ch 1, | abuseThat was good. You used really good imagery at the beginning, and the end was strong and tied it together. I only had one problem with a line: Whatever when there was a colorless moment Argh, I'm not sure why but I'm having a really difficult time with that line. Should it be Whenever there was a colourless moment I don't know, I'm just having a screwy time saying it right. Your probably right and I'm blonde, so... It was a really good fic, and thankfully you had good spacing. Bad spacing can really screw up a fic. And I would also like to say that your taste in music is amazing, assuming you like that song. |
| soda-staygold16 2006-07-05 ch 1, | abuseThat is my absolute favorite song, I know you don't want to hear it, but I hate slash and I think it could have been written without it (whatever though it's your story and I'm not trying to be mean or anything, just trying to tell you how it could be more appeling). It still was really good though, you're a talented writer, especially with your use of imagery at the begining. |
| fullyxalive 2006-05-31 ch 1, | abuselove the song, but slash scares me ever so greatly! |
| xDoodlex 2006-05-30 ch 1, | abuseAww that was realy cute! I love Johnny and Ponyboy! |
| xxxWhoAmIFoolinxxx 2006-05-29 ch 1, | abuseI loved it! Now usually I'm not one to read slash, but this is very well written, and i love that song! |