Wow... I love it! It is flowery, but prettyfully so. And I love your references to various myths (Demeter, Persephone, Tartarus...)
Mary and the rosaries were a nice touch... The purgatory too...
Angeline's dialogue is stylized interestingly. Definitely shows her descending into madness.
Awesome fic.

*steals Dim's talent and hides it under her bed*:p

I like this story with it’s many flowery parts. I shall cuddle it and take it to therapy. :p

All things silly aside you have a great style and flow of your own. I especially love the mythology references. When I was in middle school I bathed in the mythology books that the library had to offer. I feel like a smug nerd when I get the chance to say things like “Zeus was a perv,” and the always classy “why in the fudge is Thor part of The Avengers? What kind of pagan thunder god takes orders for a man in patriotic spandex?” ^_^V

This story is beautiful written and I’d give you more praise but I’m lazy and jealous.

once again i luvd all ur analogies.. my favorite being the inscense and smoke... and since i had just figued the italic wording was just wut artemis saw/figured outfrm her eyes or actions, it really doesnt make that much of a difference in my head if she was sayin them aloud or not.. and o ya,. this mte b just my idiocy sticking out.. but i dont even kno wut rosary beads r.. assuming sumthing used for praying? and if thats not it, y r they so imp to her? .. =)) ya tha wz basically the only thing that confoozed me. i alwayz l

Parody? Where? To the day, I've never seen a parody that doesn't intend to be funny (and so I think I've misunderstanding the concept of it)

It's very good, very angsty (I did consider myself warned) and descriptive, it's like Angeline's emotions override the reader's, or at least that's how I felt. There was a bit of a confusion on the supposed dialogue parts, because it's usually thoughts what you write in italics, and it'd take prior knowledge of the formatting conventions to understand that it's actually Angeline's voice, not the story style. Probably, having them said out loud in the format would help the enviroment of insanity show clearer, more visible and present rather than having the reader thinking it's all happening inside Artemis and Angeline's minds, if that's what you were aiming to in the beginning. :)

wonderfull... dreamy and fluid while still so sharp... the marvelous thing about your writing is how emotional it is without being full of itself. every time i read something of yours it feels like im being torn...

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I'm guessing (you can never be sure with your work) it is Artemis II with Angeline when Artemis I first goes missing (the news first reaching them...or sometime not long afterwards..?)
I'm going to re-read it and then think about the theme/point of plot(if there's one) etc, but I'm reviewing now. Favourite line; '...dead as Timmy, dead as her unanswered prayers.'
I don't know, the repetition was very nicely done. There were lots else (uh, typo) but that one caught my eye first.

The way you phrase her thoughts (?) was very good. Almost as if she was singing them out...a bit vague though, as if you've done her subconscious in with the conscious. Good work though-love it. *off to read it again*