yay!

oooooh qui isnt being very nice to obi...

Hey, great great story.

I luv it.

I also think that when you were typing you made guilt-quilt.

that was funny.

I also think you should fix it.

Peace Out!

(:

Very well-written, and I loved the ending. I just wish that the rating was M, as that scene where we see how Obi-Wan has seen Harvey in his dreams was quite disturbing. Other than that, I liked it.

good angst, rather creepy in parts...was kinda hoping the ghost would help out though and lovely ending. Not too mushy. cheers

Truly beautiful. It almost made me cry, and that torture part was really nasty; that kidney.. br... However, you did a very good job on this!

Great story! You had some awesome dialogue there, and you captured the angst perfectly.

will you continue it? it's very good!

this is such a good story wel done!

I really liked the second section. I didn't think it was too graphic, everything that you put was necessary.

Ah poor Obi-Wan. I really liked that line about how the only clean flesh was wear Obi-Wan's tears had washed away the blood. That was great.

I'm not sure that they have karma in GFFA, but oh well. Writer's prerogative.

Anyway, I liked how you've discussed every person's different sins in this chapter. It's kind of bringing things together.

“Stop monologuing and get to it.” Hahahahahaha I nearly fell out of my chair when I read that. Owned Xanatos, owned.

Xanatos: Shut up, I only monologue because my brilliance needs to be recorded.

Yeah whatever. It's so true though, Xanatos DOES monologue. But that was a great freaking line.

O torture scene. In a FF7 (you must be getting so sick of hearing me talk about that) fic I'm working on I totally get to torture Tifa. Torture scenes are fun to write, but hard to read. I'm totally cringing at that pully-thing. EW HIS SHOULDERS DISLOCATED. EWEWEW HE PULLED OUT HIS KIDNEY?

That was a spifftastic torture scene. Gross, but spifftastic. Xanatos is so crazy, I love him and I'm creeped out by him at the same time. Have you ever heard the song "Vendetta Red Cried Rape on a Date with Destiny" by Vendetta Red? It's a song entirely about torture, I bet you'd love it. You should look up the lyrics.

"come to where your first sin against me was committed. Here began the circle, and here it will end.” That was an awesome line, I loved it. I liked the promise at the end too, it reminds me of Cloud and Tifa. Friendships like that are really, really sweet I think.

It's fun to be mean to Obi-Wan. In my fic he gets severely injured in like, every other chapter. I don't know why, but hurt/comfort is so much better when it's him. Obi-Wan gets kidnapped by Xanatos too, but my fic is slash so obviously it's very different. Ah, poor Qui-Gon's in the dark.

Anyway, good chapter.

Gosh Qui-Gon way to be a jackass.

Xanatos: Finely someone else sees.

Me: I wasn't talking to YOU. Anyway, I just realized that the title of this story is "Can Sins Ever Be Forgiven", which I guess makes me kind of slow, but I got so excited when I read it. It's like that line in Final Fantasy 7: Advent Children. And I can see the parallels between FF7AC and your story that you drew to choose that line as your title. It makes me happy.

Xanatos: She's easily amused.

Me: Shut up you jerk. Anyway, I'm off to read the rest.