Very good! Does Snape have a thing for Lily?

Yes, it's not your best but I still liked it. The quotation at the end IS good, as you and your other reviewers have said!
(One typo - "I bright light engulfed the room")
The characters are written very well, James is just as I imagine him, and especially Lily, half killed but still determined to battle - this description of her was really vivid:
"green eyes dancing with determination and passion, her jaw set and her hair plastered to her forehead." - really captures her character in her physical appearance.

LOVE IT
Great work!
I liked that James had to ask Snape for help, one of his worst enemies.
Once again, good show!

lol...nice advertising. I really liked this one-shot. Great job with the quote at the end too... Great story again.