It would have been impossible to take the chip out like that. Since max had it since she was little, dont you think the nerves and stuff would have grown around it, making it impossible to cut the chip out without losing her hand? I mean, cmon, that whole "surgery" thing lasted lile 5 minutes with rags and a kitchen knife and nothing bad happened. In reality, even for a nirdkid or whatever, you could only do that with microsurgery, and even then you might lose your hand.

xD. That is definitely. An Epic Fail.

This would be me: Da-ng it voice!

Haha the ending was funny. Liked it, good job :)

loved it! good job!

Ah! That was AWESOME! You're quite the writer! You made Fang so cool in the story!

Holy shit...that was scary. In a scarring way. :D

-Bluejaygrl98

AWESOME. NUFF SAID.

Interesting. Nicely written, though I'm not really sure what the point of this story was. Sorry, that sounded like an insult. It wasn't meant as one. I'm just not sure how this version would change things. Anyway, still a good story.

nice. Of course, vets are always better at this sort of thing, but home surgery works just as well. Good thing they did their homework and read SURGERY FOR DUMMIES, eh?

Maybe you should put some pain description in. I always like to do that even if it's just a school assignment (there was this really gross one on the revolution where this guy got his intestines pulled out... now that was fun to write). It just seems a bit too calm for someone being sliced up by a teenager.

But I still really love it!

Geeze. You wrote this before book three, and actually knew that the chip didn't cause the Voice. You must be psychic or something.

Despite the darkness and gore of that story, I couldn't help but laugh when the voice talked. Loved it.

come ON! what is with these forever ago stories not having any CHAPTERS? if it's a ONESHOT, it has to be able to end satasfyingly at ONE chapter - and i need MORE! GAH!

love it! kinda gross having him cut her open, but it had to be done :D

love the ending, with there was more!

dancingpiggy

You should put in another couple of chapters- this story's AWESOME!