No, you did good. Again, this was very insightful and a little touching, with some droll humor thrown in. I like the line; "He wonders if that ripping feeling in his chest that he can remember is what Sasuke feels all the time. He wonders if maybe that's why

Sasuke's such a bastard. Then he wonders if maybe Sasuke was just dropped on his head when he was little." That just sounded very Naruto-ish, and I love the whole "ripping feeling" thing. So true.

You are such a good author!

ah, so thats why you have hardly any naruto p.o.v's stories. to each their own, i guess.

Well, you might not like it in there, but you write it well.

I like your depiction of Naruto and his thoughts after that disaster. I'm glad you managed to keep serious and not steer off into some land of random jokes. Even canon Naruto can be really serious. :P

I think you did good in Naruto's mind. Though you do write an awesome Shikamaru.

Why does this have no reviews? Nice representation of a "philosophical" Naruto.