 The Furox 2006-08-25 . chapter 5I'm really enjoying this story! And I particularly like the way you're handling the dragons in chapter 5. They come across more like they're equal players in the story and that makes it more fun. And I really the idea of Eclypse making raspberry sounds to express herself! I also like the extra focus on what Decepshun is thinking along the way and how she followed Moordryd into the tent at the end to help him gloat. It's so much nicer when the dragons are involved in the story instead of just standing around in the background.
Keep it up and I'm looking forward to the next chapter! |