yay! Good story! ^_^ Err... I mean chappie! yay!^_^

Oh, and u can't just have shogo go around and defeat a bunch of obelisks, 'cause it'll make him look too much like a stu :S

But anyway, good chappie/story! ^_^

Keep It Up!

Yayy! Good story! Although... "Aouiyama"... That's 5 vowels in a row lol! There aren't supposed to be more than 2! (at least in english)

But still, how do u even pronounce that?

U also have a few "stupid mistakes" (mistakes that can be easily fixed and recognized by proofreading ur story). Such as: "As the egg vanish. It is replaced a giant black dragon as it looms over Shogo, bearing his trade mark; the red eyes." (it should be "As the egg vanishes, it is replaced a giant black dragon as it looms over Shogo, bearing his trade mark; the red eyes."

So I would just suggest proofreading ur chapter before u put it up.

Good Story!

Great duel!