wow this is such a great strater to a story

This is good so far. I only have one problem. It's supposed to be during the 1800s and there's a strange mix of the more proper speech they would have used (being educated more than the commoner) and modern speech. It doesn't go well together. Otherwise, I really like this. I ALWAYS wanted Anna as a vampire, it's just so much better...:)

Corrections to your Italian (I'm assuming you used a web-translator), I tried to keep the rhyme at the expense of proper word order:

L' uno chi alla luna piena è morto
di fronte a noi presto stanotte sarà risuscitato.
Gli concederà la vita il sangue mio .
Dunque, con questo pugnale, mi taglio.
Si alzi, l'illustre Van Helsing, e vivi ancora una volta,
perche possiamo pareggiare il punteggio ora

New translation:
The one who died at the full moon
will be resurrected soon before us on this night (tonight)
My blood will grant him life.
Thus, I cut myself with this knife (dagger).
Arise, great Van Helsing, and live again once more
for now we can even the score

(this was what you had)

L'UN WHO È MORTO ALLA LUNA PIENA. SI ALZERÀ PRIMA DEGLI STATI UNITI SU QUESTA NOTTE
PRESTO. L'ANIMA DI ME ASSEGNERÀ LA SUA VITA. COSÌ LO HO TAGLIATO ATTRAVERSO CON QUESTA LAMA. ALZI IL GREAT VAN HELSING E VIVA UNA VOLTA DI PIÙ. PER ORA, POSSIAMO ANCHE IL SEGNO.

If, however, you're REALLY going for authenticity, the incantation should probably be in Latin. I can translate it, but it would take a bit more time.

This is good great job

That was awesome.

YOU KILLED VAN HELSING *LAUGHS HYSTERICALLY* *CHEERS* you made my day...i'm going to kill van helsing in my story as well...somewhere in like chapter 35 of "Blood innocence and Seduction." *GRINS* EVIL GABRIEL! *GRINS* sorry... love the story line...

YES I WOULD LOVE A SEQUAL! I love William, he's so funny and I would love a sequal that would be awesome please please please make one!

Yes i would love to reed your new story. So please post it soon.

WO NEW STORY GO FOR IT ! to much cofee at new mall 2 day:S

on write a sequal please.

I love this story even though you already finished probably. Just work on your spelling and the then/than difference and you should be prfect. oh and when someone new starts talking, you start a new paragraph.

sounds very interesting...cant wait 2 read it...whats the plot going to be like? hope there will be more of Anna and Dracula as well! :D

Sounds interesting. I'm not sure though... what's your idea for the plot (or just ideas that you've got so far?)

Just because you could navigate away from the main characters (Dracula and Anna) because there's a lot of OC's in there. Not good.

Oh well, I'm sure I'll love it anyway :) Just curious, though.

hey sara! this is my name for fanfiction! ok well i need your help cuz i have no idea who im gunnaget my story on teh web so call me! YOUR AN AUNTT! IM SO HAPPY FOR YOU GUYS ESPECIALLY UR SISTER!

aww I loved that ending at Im not usually one for the romancey mushy lovey dovey type endings but that wasa heart felt and sweet. I loved this so much I cant believe it's over (cries and weeps) oh well I reacon you should write a sequal to this or summin and p.s loved anna killing van helsing I dont like good guys or ones that try to be ny wayz spesh if theytry to kill dracula!