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| MadBrilliant1880 2007-11-28 ch 1,  | abusewakka often speaks before he thinks, doesn't he? |
| Kalivax 2007-02-09 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful a wonderful read, a bit confusing at first, but still was a wonderful read--very much made my day! |
| Shido21 2006-07-10 ch 1, | abuseI really loved this story. I thought I had reviewed it before, but I guess I didn't. Sorry about that. I really liked the ending. Awesome job. --Darkpoet303 |
| Lady of the Thorn 2006-06-16 ch 1, | abuseI kept meaning to leave a review for you on here, but always got interrupted. Anyway, I like it a lot. The imagery with the shells was really nice and I liked the way you had the thumps in between the action. |
| Warui-Usagi 2006-06-04 ch 1, | abuseWoah! That was cool! I liked it! |
| rr1963 2006-06-03 ch 1, | abuseWell honestly, it could probably use another edit, but it was good. Just some structural things to maybe increase the effectiveness a little--play around with putting the thumps on the same line as the names to better establish the rhythm of the heartbeat, put the last "you're lucky Rikku..." in italics instead of quotes, stuff like that. (I know you're using italics for other stuff.) But don't take it _down_. |
| sagdragon3002 2006-06-03 ch 1, | abuseI didn't think it was nearly as bad as you said. I was confused at the beginning, but I think that was your intention; either way, I was hooked til the last sentence, and that shows the sign of a great fic! Plus...it has Auron and Rikku in it. Maybe not together face-to-face, maybe not an aurikku thing, but they're still in it, and that earns brownie points =) ~Dragon |
| Freakyckik 2006-06-02 ch 1, | abuseThis was great!! don't take it down. you should write more fanfics ^_^ |
| jinjer 2006-06-02 ch 1, anon. | abuseOoh, that was really nice! Don't take it down! |
| Farther 2006-06-01 ch 1, | abuseThat image of Rikku throwing shells into the water is so affecting, and I love your imagery - I hope you don't decide to take this down, it's really good ;) |
| Gining 2006-06-01 ch 1, | abuseHey, something origanal! It wasn't Yuna bashing. And I liked it very much. But one thing I didn't understand. (Bit slow in the brain tonight) What was up with the begining. The part with the nonsensical sounds? Anyway, great fic and thanks! Gin |