 Crystalice24201 2007-07-18 . chapter 1Squee!!
One second Im bawling my head off, the next Im grinning like Im insane!
You're really awesome =D |
 ThePureHearted 2007-05-07 . chapter 1 SO ROMANTIC! i love it! |
 iamaspidermonkey 2007-01-06 . chapter 1Aw...so cute! Yay for them! Aw...really, that's all I can say. Your stories are so good. I just came across them and have read mostly all of them. Just now I got around to reviewing. *ish lazy* -_-
They are really good though, and this was was just so cute and...and...awesome! Yay!
Okay, enough rambling from me. Hehe...you'll get enough rambling later. Just don't stop writing, because your stories are good!
-Spider. |
 dolly-dear 2006-10-14 . chapter 1Sweet, cute, wonderfully written, I love it. A decent RikuxSora oneshot without any sex. Fanfiction needs more of these. |
 AliVal13 2006-08-04 . chapter 1I read this, like, a while back! I was certain I reviewed. O_o Oh well. Anyway, I thought that it was pretty cool then and I still like it lots! ^^ |
 ZeratheNightDancer 2006-06-28 . chapter 1that was so cute! i really like your writing, and i read on you rprofile that you were quiting! i love your stories and you write really well. i want to be able to write stories like yours. yeah, that sounds really corny but it's true. i'd be really sad if you quit now. i'll wait however long it takes for you to update. i'm a very patient person. please don't quit, and good one-shot! (you don't have to listen to me if you don't want to) |
 ShadowAngelofDeath 2006-06-05 . chapter 1 omg! that was so sweet! i love it! |
 Shinigami966890 2006-06-04 . chapter 1Beautiful =D |
 Omnikid 2006-06-03 . chapter 1Hey, it's been a while since you've added a new story. i hope you continue it. and keep up the good work |
 Sai-ryo Aura Feana 2006-06-02 . chapter 1Aw... So cute!!
I love your stories so much!!
Update the others soon!!
Love ya's!! |
 The confused brunet 2006-06-02 . chapter 1 In order of appearance:
"The brunet sighed","the young boy’s lover.", "the silver haired boy", "the younger boy", "the older boy", "thought the brunet,", "the other boy", "the silver haired boy", "The startled brunet", "He advanced towards the boy,", "insisted the younger boy,", "He was pushed up against the younger, igniting flames of anger in the brunet.", "the brunet kicked him", "the brunet stared after","The younger boy", "The brunet shook his head.", "arms around the brunet,", "the silver haired boy gasped,", "the silver haired enigma", "grabbing the boy and kissing him", "with the silver winning,", "the silver haired boy", "sensitive ear of the younger", "back-tracked to the boy’s mouth", "the boy mumbled", "kissed the brunet"
Is this about Riku and Sora or Silver Haired Boy and Brunet Boy? |
 Yxonomei 2006-06-02 . chapter 1I enjoyed that! What a refreshingly wonderful read! Agnst and fluff, yummy! |
 Torrina Shirogane 2006-06-02 . chapter 1*grin* Love this fic...Your fluffy one-shots always manage to put a smile on my face. >w<
Let's see...Any constructive criticism to give...?
*rereads* Hm...There isn't a lot I'd really change. Though I did notice one thing:
"[...] You’re hardly ever home long enough for me to actually be with you...and...you haven’t touched me in months..."
Is Sora exaggerating there, or has it really been that long since he and Riku last made love? If it's the latter, it makes the scenario seem a little less believable. Even with Riku working all the extra hours, I can't imagine he'd go that long without having sex with his boyfriend (especially considering the fact that they live together). Sora would have confronted him about his change in behavior much earlier, like after a few weeks or so. But, a few months? Entirely different ballgame. At least, that's the way I see it. Not to mention, I think if it had truly been that long, the sexual frustration would have eaten away at the both of them--I doubt either of them would have been able to take it.
Gah, hopefully that made sense...I feel rather illiterate today for some reason. ^^;
Anywho, other than that, I didn't really see too much.
Watch your pronouns, though. Lots of 'brunet's and 'boy's.
Lol, overall, though...Amazing job. ^_^ |
 Sikomi 2006-06-02 . chapter 1This was soo sweet! This was really good, whould be nice if you wrote their wedding! ^^ But it's your oneshot!! ^^ |
 Sekre 2006-06-02 . chapter 1Cute!
Sekre |
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