Nice story. One comment is that if a battle like this was to occur Neji probably wouldn't instagate it. He's a nice guy like that.

NO! Why must it END!? Will cookies make u happy enough to write a sequel?
Yay! Love the fic ^.^

other then grammer this was a pretty good fic, throwing in the bits of Japanese (other then the technique names) doesn't really work well unless you can be consistent with it,(like Neji's greeting Hinata in japanese then calling Gai 'Sir Gai' Rather then Gai-sensei.) there is the wood clone thing but that's a forgivable mistake. the only things that really stands out is the fact that

A) the fact that Neji would probably opt to dodge the Chidori(as it's easy to avoid when you see it coming.)

B) while the water clones range could be extended at the cost of more chakra each has a limited supply chakra (about a 10th of the orginal) they don't drain more chakra from the origonal depending on what techniques they use.

but other then that good story I look forward to more work from you just please work on the grammer it'll make your work much better.

Nothing against you, but the Moku Bunshin is only available to Yamato and the Shodai Hokage. It's Shodai's technique, not even the Sharingan can copy it, and Orochimaru implanted some of his DNA into fifty genin and Yamato was the only survivor

Shiroi-niichan finishd his first fic after our fights about word and character counts! Welcome to the fandom! I'll wait for your sequel.