that was fucking AWESOME. I really want to know who she is, she seemes cool is she like one of teh supernatural creatures of something!?

This story is really touching and full of emotion and description. You are such a good writer, this story is really enthralling. The ending is especially good, I find myself wishing this wasn't just a one-shot but I can't help thinking that to explain the ending would make it less rather than more. I believe that leaving to the reader's imagination makes it much more potent.

So sad but so beautiful.
Good work.
Sorry for the short review but I don't have much time...
I really hope Kakashi will come back...

Kakashi, come back !
Beautifull one shot. And very touching ^_^

This was really intriguing, I'd like to read more if you're willing to write it.

Its really interesting, and sparks in the reader, questions such as what happened to our three heros? Because they are clearly not in Konoho. Or is this story AU? I wonder what happened to make Naruto a mute boy? and who this women is? And what kinda relationship is this, that Kakashi, Iruka and the 'she' are in? All this questions lights interest, and I hope to see how it goes.
By the way, I like that fact that it is descriptive, but sometimes it gets a rad confusing. And I can tell that English is not your first language, you made some past/present tense mistakes and one or two garmmar mistakes. Other than those error, which can be sorted out by looking for a beta-reader, this story looks promosing.