Very profound, i think. Still, I didn't get some of it (like the last verse). Either I'm really stupid, or you are too deep. Or maybe my english still isnt that good, or maybe that is just an excuse. Nonetheless, any attempt of doing something more profound and intelligent should be praised. I think you have a talent, and should keep it up. Now about the last verse, what is this cultured race? Am I very wrong here, or is there a racial connotation? Are you writing about the struggles of the black people and their still unequal position in society, their heroes and their martyrs? ..."sweeps its ebony hand to behold a soul so white" ... if you are,than this is really some great work. But I remain confused. Maybe you shoul explain it some more, where you get your inspiration from, and how star wars is associated to it. (Even if star wars is the inicial sprinwell of inspiration, that ispiration can take us far and into deeper subjects). I hope you continue writing. All the best from Mary A.