 SongoftheDarquePhoenix 2009-11-27 . chapter 7Very um... unique fic. |
 HerGoldenWings 2009-09-24 . chapter 4:) love it. |
 ramenlover1050 2009-09-18 . chapter 7 Please continue this story! I love what you wrote its so exciting! Please update. |
 One_of_the_Lost 2009-09-07 . chapter 7 It's really good!
Please update soon because I would really enjoy reading more. I absolutely love the Sorting Hat's song. It is extremely creative and very original. Also, the idea for the story is really amazing.
I hope to the highest that you can update in the near future because this is one of the best stories that I have ever read on fanfiction and I think it is really awesome.
Goodbye! |
 Cassandra30 2009-08-25 . chapter 7I do truly love that Song! You have got to come back please and finish this story! |
 Cassandra30 2009-08-25 . chapter 6Big brother??! Oh that would be perfect!! Love it! |
 Cassandra30 2009-08-25 . chapter 5OMGoodness! Hee hee Malfoy! Cross species! X-Rated! ha ha ho ho Could happen to a nicer guy! Harry helped his Severus! Freed him from the Mark! Excellent! Superb story! |
 Cassandra30 2009-08-25 . chapter 4Wow! You have a truly fascinating and creative imagination! |
 Cassandra30 2009-08-24 . chapter 3Whoa! Very absorbing! |
 Cassandra30 2009-08-24 . chapter 2Great chapter! Very good! Highly imaginative and creative. |
 Cassandra30 2009-08-24 . chapter 1Excellent story! I can't seem to find "A Twist of Fate" by Eureka though. |
 leona-the-critic 2009-07-28 . chapter 7Lovin' it. |
 Rune The Secret Child 2009-07-15 . chapter 6Well then, I have only just read your Profile request for no suggestions. I only tried because it is a little hard to follow the story, I meant no offense and sincerely hope not to be blocked for it. I apologise. |
 Rune The Secret Child 2009-07-15 . chapter 7Alright to start off, i Love the idea and so far it has been quite interesting.
Now to the Constructive critisism part. this may come very late but there are several hole and inconsistancies for intance the Weasly twins were in the forest for a week but the pison from the flowers kills within 24 hours... they would have had to come in contact with it before the acromantula got them. Next McGonagol saw Snape going towards the dungons muttering about potions when the students rushed out of the hall, but he was unconsious up in the Hospital wing... Another came with the Prime minister. He says that he was warned by the Board member who had visited the castle in teh morning, but Lucius never left Hogwarts and had been kept busy by the castle.
Those are the only obvious holes, beyond that its just a few sentaces miussing words and mispellings all around.
Beyond that very good Idea, are you still planning on continueing? |
 The Dread Pirate Roberts 2009-07-08 . chapter 3 Dude, seriously get a beta. Your story is good but you make a lot of little mistakes such a writing whole instead of hole and defiantly instead of definitely. Also sometimes you phrase things in a way that is slightly awkward. All these things could easily be corrected by a good beta. |