Reviews for Anomen's Thoughts

Reviews For: Anomen's Thoughts

Brynn Dharielle 2008-09-20 ch 1,	abuseWell, since I don't remember very much of "Reclaiming", but I wanted to pick up reading your fics again (after all this while xD), I figured I'd start with the beginning now. I have to say that, for what appears to have been your first one-shot, this was REALLY good. You've got plenty of instances of telling instead of showing, but it's the kind that's more necessary than distracting. It sets the pace, more rather than interrupt it. I have no idea if you considered this when you wrote or you simply have a knack for it, but this is a great property of the fic. What's even better, you managed to give Anomen a dose of realism that he doesn't have even in the game. His relationship with the PC is simple as well, but at the same time moving and constructed gradually, in such a way that it's very believable. I like the way you use your words as well. You don't abuse the thesaurus, and there are very few adverbs, all placed strategically. That makes the story very easy to read. The only thing I'm not sure about is the use of "wakening up" at the start of paragraph 9. I'm not a native English speaker, so I can't say for sure, but I've never seen something like that, so it might not be grammatically correct. I'm really sorry if I'm mistaken. Then, there's the small detail of "the other paladins" at the start of paragraph 12. That doesn't quite fit because Anomen is not a paladin, but a fighter/cleric. It will probably be a bit difficult to replace because you need something simple, in order not to disturb the pace of the fic. That aside, and getting back to my original thoughts, it was a very enjoyable read. It's short and kept simple, but somehow that's very fitting.
Sophie, the Paladin 2008-01-03 ch 1, anon.	abuseBrought tears to my eyes, though my heart has been hardened by the long battles against Evil. Has to end like this? I hoped for a happy ending...!
Asrayu 2007-03-17 ch 1,	abuseAw Anomen! {sniffle} Nice fic, it makes me feel for the poor guy. Quite convincing feelings expressed for the aftermath of a relationship I would say. Well done! :)
TionneDawnstar 2006-11-21 ch 1,	abuseWow that was really good! Anomen was always my favorite character from that game, I think you captured him very well! Great Job!
Inconspicuous Acuity 2006-09-16 ch 1,	abuseWell. Knowing myself, I'm really not surprised that I've read a fic containing just thoughts. Even though they were Anomen's and I am one of the many Anomen-haters. Unbelievably enough, I felt a pang of sympathy and pity for the poor NPC. I mean, he may be a snobby and overly proud and zealous idiot from my perspective, but that doesn't deny him the right to be happy. Or maybe his moping is just too intense and vividly described in your fic to just skip over. ;) Other than that, there's also the possibility that this didn't bother me because your Anomen actually has a reason other than boasting and showing himself off. He spoke to her about himself because he wanted to converse and didn't know about what, not because he wanted to look high and mighty. I wish there were any hints of such reasons in the game. Well done.
Divine-Feline 2006-09-16 ch 1,	abuseAww, that was very sad but very sweet. (and very well written)
Amousca 2006-07-22 ch 1,	abuseI can't believe I hadn't reviewed this. I remember reading and thinking how incredibly good it was; it was such a beautifully done reflection on Anomen's past, focusing on the important events and avoiding the details. Just now I saw your name in the story you reviewed of me, and I wondered where I had seen it, and so went to visit your profile and discovered the huge mistake I had done not to review this. So it's corrected now :) Anyway... a very nice piece of fiction.
noneko 2006-06-18 ch 1,	abuseSo, wow. I really liked this. It was poignant without being overblown, and I loved the connection that, yes, the Bhaalspawn pretty much up and left him. And I salute you for being able to pull of what I've been trying to do, lol. Fantastic job, and I hope that you write more soon!
Somebody 2006-06-08 ch 1, anon.	abuseYou, my friend, did the impossible... You made me actually tear-up after reading a fic... I salute you(and Anomen of course.) Made me wanna go hug that poor tormented cleric.. think I will.
Kendris 2006-06-08 ch 1,	abuseNicely written! The feeling of melancholy, bittersweet nostalgia flows consistently throughout, and the thoughts and emotions ring true. Excellent first work!
Finduilas88 2006-06-05 ch 1,	abuseA nice story, and it captures very well how agonizing it must be for the lover left behind; no matter how you look at it, their beloved has decided that something else is more important than they are. Especially for someone like Anomen, whose self-worth is so tied up in what his lover feels and thinks about him. I can certainly see how it would be difficult for him to face reminders of his lover. I enjoyed this, and hope your Anomen does get on with his life and find some happiness. Me, I'm way too soft-hearted to have any of my PCs who are in a romance ascend!
Pen52 2006-06-04 ch 1,	abuseWhat to say? There are few fics that attempt to portray Anomen dealing with the aftermath of TOB if the PC decided to pursue godhood. I think you did a good job. You managed to find just the right amount of hope and bitterness that make a story like this work. Is this a one shot, or are there possible sequels? If there's a continuation, I'll be happy to read it.

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