Lovely bit! You're got a great talent.

However, you should really change your summary. It sounds poetic, but people get wrong ideas about the German language (and it just causes frowns in native speakers).

the german word for "dream" is "Traum" without an "a" ..the german word "Trauma" means the same like the english word "trauma"..like "brain trauma" or "chest trauma"

But all in all means "dream" "Traum" in german

I loved that little twist at the end. I think it would be Chase, who is oddly the most vulnerable of the group even if it isn't blatantly obvious, would have the most trouble coming to terms with the shooting.

this is really good. you should write (if you don't already) for serious.

Clever twist and impressively written. I discovered this story after reading some of your others, you have some great ideas and a real talent. I hope you write more!

Interesting take on House' shooting.. I like it.

God and peace
Vanessa :)

lol i had to read the end line over a few times to make sure i understood it. you put an amazing twist on this story i wasnt expecting it at all
ur an amazing writer

Do you write professionally? Because you should. This is *good*.

Oh, very good! You had me totally thinking that it was House we were talking about from the beginning. The end was a complete surprise. Considering that this was a one-shot you probably intended that, so a pat on the back to you!

Ooh, I like! NICE twist at the end with Chase. And of course, the stain still being on the carpet...I like that idea, twisted as it may be. It might be interesting to observe this same scenario from Cameron and/or Foreman's POV.

WOW!
That was...that was...I'm almost speachless!
Brilliant, wonderful and the final shot...perfect doesn't even begin to cover it! I'm gonna print this and read it all over again and again!