I liked this. It was subtle and pretty realistic, didn't force the romance at all. And you didn't forget about or disregard Keira's feelings for Jak. *thumbs up* A+!

I think the only real issue I had was with how quickly Keira switched from "get out of Daxter's bar" to "do you need some help?" I can see the transition happening, but it just felt a little rushed.

Other than that, I think this is a nice piece of work!

This is terrific, too! I love how you've established the relationship between the characters, and also how you've portrayed them as individuals. Two characters I feel missed out on a fair bit in Jak 3!

I like that Keira wants to help in any way possible, and that she's even willing to cook. ;) I also liked that, even though she's worried about Jak, she's also worried about Daxter too.

Torn and Keira both seem IC to me. A very good fic. Looking forward to seeing more works from you in the future.

Yeah, any TK implications, no matter how minute, are welcome! I really liked how you didn't make Kiera whinny and weak, made Torn human, and made everything go at a believable pace. I can't tell you how many TK pairings (despite there being very few) I've read where the first chapter shows Torn being a jerk and Kiera acting suicidal, then by the next chapter they're making out on his counch! It's seriously refreshing to read a story with a preception of time and emotions. You should really continue it!

-mecca-dog