Come on, reviewers! The swearing was fine! The story wouldn't have been as angry/angsty/Oliver without the swearing.
I really loved this. Both of them were exceptionally in character, and I thought the whole Percy-goes-straight thing keeps this all in canon (as much as some Oliver/Percy writers would love to forget PC) and Well Done, Person-who-wrote-this.

that was really weird! i didn't get it at ALL! hope the next chapters aren't as confusing.. and don't make oliver sound so cocky! he's too hott for that! otherwise it's really good!

Wow! You absolutely MUST continue. This could be a brilliant ansty/romantic fic. It would be cule to explore Percy's side and have them end up with each other at the end. *sighs* There are far too few good Oliver/Percy fics out there. I'm okay with the cursing, I curse in my head like that, however, I try not to say it out loud. Please continue *gives desperate smile*

LotsaLuv Lily

awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww...poor ickle Oliver with his potty mouth..I love Oliver! Did you see him in the movie? Can you spell HOT? Why yes I can H-O-T...very good...me...

drop a bit of the swearing and it'll be fine.

just a tad too explicit at the moment.

I must say, im not really into the whole "slash" scene but this is some great stuff. You are a very excellent writer.

[raises an eyebrow] I never pegged Oliver for intense swearing, but everybody's got a right to express himself when his lover's decided all of a sudden he's (one) straight and (two) getting married to a bore. Because that's pretty much what Penelope is: a pretty bore. Poor kids. I love the leap into Oliver's stream of consciousness; it's a really interesting place, and I can't even begin to separate all the self-deception, rage, betrayl, and other goodies from each other. And then there's Percy, who is certainly either in denial or bi, though I'd much rather see him with Oliver than Penelope, personally, but it would take a great feat of courage to stray from that rigid conformist safety net he's established. Poor poor Percy. Keep writing, and may the wind be always at your back.

Ah. About the cursing, since several people seem to think there's too much. This is the bleary stream-of-consciousness of a bitter and in some ways /whiny/ Oliver Wood. He's upset and feeling rather helpless and useless and frustrated. He's angry, childishly angery and muttering cursewords while he kicks at gravel. It's his voice, and that seems to offend some people. I did use the word ' ' a lot when writing that, but it's part of Oliver's half desensitized half upset mindset.

You over-use the word " ". It just gets annoying. You use that word for the sake of it, because you want to use it, not just because it fits in with the content.

this is so sad- poor oliver!

Wow! Percy's quite the little prick, isn't he? I like you Oliver very much.

*muses* Y'know...if Percy really doesn't have any feelings for Penny, I'll be glad to take over...

That was wonderful! Gotta love it.

Ouch. Now that was... unexpectedly bitter. I sympathize with Percy in a way- it's soo easy to conform with what society expects of you. But it's never right. Anyhoo... most impressive characterizations.

That was...er...um,... explicit.