That was good and fictionally true.It was pretty different but everyone knows that story a bit.

That was one of the best fics involving Lust I've sen in a while. It was all in character, even the Scar/Lust, which for me is impossible to write correctly. Very good job.

aww~
sad.. T_T
..loved it though~
^^

I'm not sure why you knock yourself down in the "notes". You're very eloquent and I'd be intrigued to read more of your works. Very nicely done!

Touching, and very in-character. Don't worry about coherence - very understandable, it.

Your language is lovely, the images equally so.

Overall, excellent fic.

-PTG

I mock you and your newfound obsession. :-P

Really, though, it's very pretty and if I was more awake it would probably be deep. I especially like the part at the end: "she begins to suspect that the only victory here is his".

(Poor Lust. Poor Scar, whose name nobody even remembers...)

nice. nicely written. :]