Interesting POV. You could expand this, there's a lot there.

FALL ALREADY FOR GOD SAKES

Wow. This is very accurate. For some reason the phrase "and don't cross the imaginary line" keeps making me laugh...hm. Don't mind me though. Good job.

For some reason, it's very hard to find a well written story when it involves sheppard and teyla. It's sad but very true. This fic however is the first one that I actually read from begining to end and I really enjoyed it. You should write more of these stories because you have a real talent for it.

this is good to read & well-written. i especially like the last couple of lines. ...when are they just gonna get together, darnit?!