I rather like the style of this story. It actually does have a very nice quality that feels rather professional. For once, I actually have nothing to complain about style-wise. I also compliment your use of a spell checker. ^_^ Plus, I only found one grammar error. The main complaint I have is the content of the story. I just don't like the incest-like quality...

And don't complain about your reading and writing load. I have 2 books to read, 3 articles to read, 1 story to finish, 1 to start, and an article to write for my blog.