Reviews for An Unexpected World

The True Crossover Queen
2006-06-17
ch 1,

abuseWell, this fic is actually pretty cool in its own way. You combine what is probably the greatest Disney cartoon of all time with Kingdom Hearts, so there's already brownie points for you based on that alone. However, perhaps, I could make a suggestion that you can go back and change or maybe just use it for chapter two. Anyway, the dialogue is kinda squished together in one big paragraph in lots of places in the story. That makes it a little hard for people to read. I think it would improve the story greatly and give it a more professional feel, I believe. Other than that, it was quite neat and I can't wait to read more it! :D

SpartanCommander
2006-06-12
ch 1,

abuseTHis maybe pretty interesting.

Also Dark Wing would not tread being teamed up with Sora and company very well he will probably loose his temper and go into a complete fit at the prospect he usually does especially if they mess up the entire situation... or show him up but I don't think that's likely.

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