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| Jimm 2008-09-12 ch 4,  | abuseInteresting story so far, thanks for sharing it with us. |
| Shadow65 2008-08-20 ch 4, | abuseplease update this is a good story |
| rldragon 2008-07-23 ch 4, | abuseInteresting ... update soon :) ! |
| jupimako 2008-07-16 ch 4, | abusereally really great story!! i hope you post a new chapter soon! |
| RavenclawAmber 2008-06-26 ch 2, | abuseI loved the bit about the pillow. I thought it was very cute. The differences between the two worlds aren't that apparent at first, but Harry is starting to pick up on them. An interesting read so far. |
| I.am.so.sick. 2008-06-25 ch 4, | abuseAmazing. I absolutely loved it ^^ Please, when you do have the time, continue writing for I wouldn't bear the misery of not knowing what'll happen next! I like Hera, she maked me laugh xD Best Regards |
| RavenclawAmber 2008-06-24 ch 1, | abuseYou have officially confused the Hell out of me :) I've read the first chapter thus far, and will continue reading. Just FYI, there are a few more typos-- mostly words missing a beginning or ending letter. Hope that helps some! |
| I am the Bane of my Sword 2008-04-23 ch 4, | abuseHarry... you know you want to lust after Hera... |
| Meteoricshipyards 2008-03-19 ch 4, | abuseNice. I missed the last line "How had he known that he needed to leave" the first time. I assume that's talking about he trip to save Hera? Liked the line about Zeus Potter (don't remember if it's in this chapter.) One thing I'm not sure about is the time of the attack. Was it night? Afternoon? If night, the broom would have been a safe way to go - fairly invisible. Thanks for writing. Looking forward to more. Tom A. PS. Luna's Hubby is finished. |
| Meteoricshipyards 2008-03-18 ch 3, | abuseI've seen stories where Harry's friendly with the goblins, but never one where he's friends with a goblin. Nice. Don't understand Harry's change of name as he goes off to party with Katie. He's planning on going to Hogwarts, right? He'll see all these people with the Mortimer name, so what's going on? Anyway, thanks for the story. Hope you update it soon. Tom A. |
| Meteoricshipyards 2008-03-18 ch 1, | abuseThat's interesting. A bit different than the Silver Aegis' story, but could be interesting, as it isn't a "re-do" story. How is Harry going to disguise himself? Mortimer? Mortimer? Do you hate him? "Mortimer, you are the next thing to a fool!" "Well, gosh, Mr. Bergen, I wouldn't call you a fool." - Edgar Bergen and Mortimer Snerd. Thanks for writing. Tom A. |
| silverlasso 2008-03-13 ch 4, | abuseVery interesting story...I hope at some point Harry will actually start knowing stuff instead of being an ignoramus. Looking forward to more. Btw, WotR is amazing, and if you don't update, I will kill you. |
| Dumbledore 2008-02-12 ch 4, | abusei like the story! i hope to read more soon. |
| ominix 2008-02-05 ch 4, | abusegood work. keep it up! |
| Opaque 2008-01-02 ch 4, anon. | abuseYour transitions need work. The flow going from the party to Hera's house and back leaves the reader feeling like... what the hell is going on?! All of a sudden Harry leaves the party to apparate to Hera's for no particular reason. Um, ok... that really makes sense. Similarly, your entire story lacks direction. So far, Harry has been getting situated for the last four chapters. Where are you going with this? Do you have something in mind? Or is he just going to drift around in this parallel universe wondering about the differences? Your writing style is decent, but the plot needs work. Good luck. |