Hm... A sergeant? I have absolutely no idea who that could be. :P

What is this song? You didn't say. Other than that, this scores points. Good job.

Cute! I have to say I like your writing, even if not all the topics agree with me. This was nice, though. Whimsical. I'm going to go see if there's anything else on your list that catches my eye.

Great start but it feels unfinished. You need to add another chapter, maybe another song that you can connect to this story? It just feels unfinished right now. Please continue!

ee! Evin/Miri! This would have to be one of my favourite (if not my favourite) minor characters pairing.

Might the sergeant be Dom? Possibly?

Do you have a sequel? Or something like that? I don't think I have enough time to go through all your stories (you do have a lot - kudos to you) but i will at some stage.

Cheers, Ingrid

Evin/miri is such a great pairing. They are so sweet together.

This is your second or third fic I've read, and I'd just like to say how much I enjoy your very original talent for incorporating lyrics into your work. It's COOL. Will be reading more, undoubtedly with equal pleasure.

A very cute, fluffy Miri/Evin. Though the italics seemed out of place and interrupted the flow of the story. It was a nice touch showing how they were friends, but Evin wishing it was something more.

Loved it, LOVED LOVED LOVED it! Alright, i just adore Evin/Miri. You are really talented. I love the brusings and that he regretted not kissing her, it was all very well written :).

if it counts for anything i enjoyed it

OK, i love this. it's nice to see some Miri/Evin, there's so little of it! really! if you go write another, PLEASE! inform me! (i'd write one bt i'm not allowed to post stuff on this site!)

I think that, if you want to, you could do a GREAT full-length Miri/Evin fic!

FB

I love Evin/Miri.

Update soon!

-MSB

It's very interesting. I don't get the verse in italics.

Woho! Great start...just wondering are you going to continue with the lyrics? I love any Evin and Miri fic so please hurray up and start the next chapter!

aww the love...this betta not be a one-shot and make him do something! KISS HER! KISS HER! (pounding fist on desk):) and the lovesick sergent is...Dom?

OMG. EVIN/MIRI FLUFF. GIMME.

Seriously, though, UPDATE! I haven't seen this pairing since rubic-cube did Queen's Riders. You are going straight on my favorites list. Both of them. I LOVE YOU!