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moonshine86
2009-08-21 . chapter 7
Aw~, this story was just so sweet and cute!! Truly loved it!^^
KaT stah
2009-07-10 . chapter 1
I'm so gonna keep reading this! It's funny and I love your nejisaku stories!
Charmful ika
2009-03-11 . chapter 7
OMGSH! THIS WAS AWESOME! Best NejiSaku fic I've ever read ! HAHAAHAHAH AWESOME !

cookies for you!
Freaked Out Angel
2008-12-28 . chapter 7
ah so cute! but why did your story have to end?!?!? it's just so fantasticlly great!
Blinking Through The Haze
2008-11-08 . chapter 1
I LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCH ITS AWESOME ITS HELLA FUNNY
Okuyukashii
2008-08-16 . chapter 7
It's a really sweet story, though I don't prefer NejiSaku. I like how Sasuke noticed other people's styles in Sakura's attacks. Great job!
Sinistera of the Akatsuki
2008-08-06 . chapter 7
keep it up update soon kk
the wandering path
2008-06-16 . chapter 1
Hmm, what can I say...
Alot of people seem to be singing your praises...

On the contrary, I think this is just an average b-grade nejisaku story. I think neji's character was ooc; he usually acts more stoic and much more colder, unless you mean to tell me that their relationship had already started long before they headed off for the mission. There was no gradual unfolding of his feelings for her, it's just there to begin with - and this irks me alot because you never mentioned how it started, or showed how it progresses, (only showing a teeny bit at the part where he rushes to rescue Sakura.

As for Sakura, she's detected on my Marysue radar. Pretty, kind, cheeky, cheerful, soulful, whatever adjective that you seem to like to put in, in addition to being super-powerful. I hated the chinadoll phrase in chapter 7, just simply confirmed my suspicions.

On the plus side, the story flows well, sentence structure, vocabulary, grammar are all above par. While I don't really get the significance of the quotes at the beginning of every chapter , I appreciate the effort to find romance-y quotes from the songs. It fits appropriately to the theme of romance of your story. Though I think you need to work on your character and plot development abit more.

Disclaimer: A review is not a praise/ego-booster. Feel free to pm me if that's necessary.
KoolKunoichi224
2008-05-04 . chapter 5
Wow... I just finished chapter 5 (cause i gotta leave soon, drivin to Vegas) and so far it's been really good. I'll post a review again when i'm done reading the story
Pathseekerme
2008-05-03 . chapter 7
Wonderful! The whole thing's good, and I don't even like the show or the type of show. My daughter watches it. But your story, the writing, the plot, is great! Don't stop writing! You are going far, my friend...
Scarletpagan
2008-01-12 . chapter 7
good story! i especially liked the whole sasuke jealousy thing, it was a good touch. Neji was gorgeous tho with the little bits of possessiveness (i am a major fan of all things possessive and/or jealous, it makes me all tingly lol)
InARealPickle
2007-09-21 . chapter 7
YIPPEE!

XOXOXOXO
Neji
m00kie
2007-08-29 . chapter 7
aw... -wipes away a tear- so touching. really amazing.
Choonks
2007-08-28 . chapter 7
oh... dear god, i nearly burst into tears at the words he said... omg i can dscribe ow tear-jerking it felt, well ur writting is stupendous, just a few mistakes like spacings but not to worry u can tell its two or three words rather than one :) just thought id let u know

how romantic ^_^
Choonks
2007-08-28 . chapter 5
omg.. how shweet...T_T *tears rolling in happiness* this ...this is so romantic

SCREW U SASUKE F*CK U AND UR GAY ** SERVANT KABUTO!...

that felt good to get out.. *breathes* oh.. neji's one true love ^_^
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