just wondering when the third chapt of this story will be available

Pretty good so far however there were several flaws to this story, but it's a ok idea and a good imagination

hey, nice to see, that there's another Longest Journey fanfiction. Your idea's pretty good and I'm looking forward to you writing more. Some tiny little faults with your spelling, maybe it would be good to use a beta reader? If you have one already I apologise. Well, I like the stil you write in and I hope to see more of this story in the future.

yari

Very good start, nice to see another longest journey story.