it was cute... may u write more chapters after that?

^-^ cute!

its ok u need to add a bit more emotions tho

LOL! I drew a picture with Luffy and Nami stick fugures a while ago, and just reading this reminded me soo much of it!

Aw! Short but sweet, a perfect combination.

hee hee, cute. i love how luffy is so thick, you really got his character alright!

Thats cute, "whats that red thing on your cheeks?" ain't that cute?

Adorable

Haha that's a cute story please carry on I wanna read more ^_^

hehe, that was cute! :3

Bit short.
But otherwise, GREAT!

Cute story! like it alot!!