Aww. That's too cute :D

beautiful.

Ooh. That was really good! Dani like...

Wow, that was great. I love Actions Speak Louder Than Words so I was really excited to find a story using one of its concepts. The zoo scene was really cute, but the end really got to me. In a GOOD way. I love how Mark wavers between the two boxes and chooses for himself. I felt it really shows Mark growing up, making his own descisions. So this story was great and desrves WAY more recognition. :)

That was very good. I give it two thumbs up. I would write more but I don't have time... sorry. Plus I thought everything flowed fine... except the trasition from memory to life, you could have used a break or somthing.

Ohh. I loved that! So good.

this is such an insightful story. really eye-opening. thank you for writing it!

ha! i saw this on speedrent so if you got an anon review it was probably from me...once again, this is the epitome is brilliance! characterization, themes, and plot were all seamless. :) so much love for this story!

Wow. That was great. I loved it. Beautiful! bravo! great job!

That's awsome!! I love.

Oh, that was beautiful! Really. Keep up the nice work. Cheers- UE

i. love. this. so. much!

such a great concept!! amazing!

Wow. I think you just bottled perfection. I mean, it's true; when they're in those tiny cages, zoos seem extremely cruel, especially to a smart little boy like Mark. And that seems just like something Collins would do. :D Today letting birds out in the zoo, tomorrow rewiring ATMs. :P Anyway, it was just written beautifully. Excellent work.

I.Love.It!

This totally deserves more reviews; it's AWESOME!

I love your depictions of Mark and Collins when they're kids, especially the depiction of Collins... His already existing tendancies to not obey the rules. X3

I especially loved that he freed the little bird!

As for the college application thing... Heh. I liked that part very much, too. Indeed, I liked this entire piece. The intentional symbolism & all. ^__^ Kudos for such a well organized, excellent little piece.

Perhaps it would be nice to have a transition or a break of some kind, though, between where the bird escapes and Mark when he's seventeen. I mean, it's not completely necessary, and the piece works just fine without it, but it just seemed a little odd to keep on going like that. I mean, it was obvious that they were two different... places/times from the language, but nonetheless, a transition or break might have been nice. Less... abrupt.

Anyway, excellent work!

Toodle pip!

~ Snark