wa...i likes though

I liked this, but I'm a little confused. So Iruka wanted to stay friends, but he actually didn't, and now he's in love with Kakashi and can't tell him that he wants to change that? That was my take. ~Sabrielle

m... angst...

Hm, I don't get it. Loved the story, but still lost.
:p

aw... too sad...
Beautifully done. I felt every word.

I know this is a one shot, and it's a great oneshot but I would love to see this turned into a multichapter story.

I'm not quite sure what to make of this one, it feels incomplete somehow. I'd like to have a better sense of what preceeded this scene, and what follows, or of what the characters are thinking while it's happening. Maybe you'll write more?