Oh, man.

Poor Mystique!

Interesting, nice job. The pun is a little awkward but cute anyway. :)

Cool.. heh.. i get it! "...the raven in my dark home..." Raven Darkholme! lol, clever! this is a really cool story! I just love mystique.. she is so cool!

Keep up the good work this story was great!

I realy like the consept, a LOT. I can relate to such fealings.

But all it is so far is a consept. It would be wonderful if you added more description, dialog, etc. There realy isn't a plot, just a single scene. But the consept is so good, I realy hope you will use this scene in a full story.

If you e-mail me for sugestions or anything, that's cool. I'll help if I can. But I don't get much computer time, so I don't ceap very good track of my e-mail acount.

What time frame does this happen in? Is it around the time that she escapes from X-Factor? Perhaps you could use what was going on in X-Factor to build a plot around your idea.

Good luck! It would be realy cool to see more! Good consept! v

Whow! Her ol' pal, The Bud.

This is really good! I think this is the first story I have ever read from Mystique' POV, and I really enjoyed it.