Well one word: Awesome I don't understand that you didn't have more reviews because your story is just great. Rodney hurt, behaving like a hero, then SGA SG-1 Perfect.

Thanks again for this fic !

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Okay, first off allow me to begin with the bad so what once you read that you'll understand the good. Your grammar, attention to indepth detail and names are a little off. That's okay all those things can be or could be corrected if you want them to be. It takes time, yoru tenses change more than once-which is also okay, becuase that too can be fixed by paying closer attention when you're writing. The entire thing seems very rushed, and I understand why-you're trying to convey a message of urgency and that's a good thing, but at the same time you shouldn't try and rush a scene to get to the next scene, especially if it's important. Your characters are slightly out of character (only slightly) but that's okay and can be over seen simply because this is fan fiction and the best of us tend to do that.

Now on to the good stuff (I really hope you're still reading) The premsis, general idea, is absolutely gripping. Very similiar, in some respects, to the epsiode of Stargate Merdian, but that's all right. Your idea is there and it's obvious you have a skill for writing that just needs to be developed. That said, don't let the lack of reviews (good or bad) stop you or slow you down from writing, it's not about them. As I said you have a talent give a little deeper thought to details, get a beta (I'll even offer help if you'd like it) and continue the work. It's an excellent story with a lot of feeling and emotion in it. I love McWeir, which is the first reason I clicked on the story, you have an excellent feeling between those two as well as Radek and Rodney.

Please consider what I said, and again if you're interested in a beta I'm more than willing to help out.

Steph

Hey. It's hard when people don't say anything? Isn't it? I hate it anyway. Well, I'm not much of shipper, but I thought I'd check out your story. Intersting dynamic between Zelenka and McKay and I can see McKay getting distracted from liking someone. So now it sound like he's planning something courageous. Just exactly what brings out the best in him.

I think Elisabeth is spelled Elizabeth and maybe drawing out a scene might help more. This story does sound fun though so I'm off to read the next chapter. :) Keep on trudging and don't let lack of responses keep you down. Just remember to keep the characters real to life and you'll be fine.

Is he going to die and get a chance to ascend?

He's doing a "sheppard". Being self-sacrificing...