I like this! I don't like how you altered the dialogue but then again, George Lucus isn't the best at dialogue anyway XD good job!

nice work. i love how she didn't recognise Anakin at first.

This was great!

But, personally, what I think would have made it even better is if you had concentrated on just Padme's thoughts of the scene. That's how you started it and then it shifted to be more Obi-Wan's and Anakin's points of view.

It would have been cool to read about Padme's thoughts on Anakin after she left the room. Perhaps she'd discuss it with Dorme even.

But that's just me. Good work!

She's much more than a Senator, methinks. :)
It was a fun read. Nice work! :)

nice one shot, A little like the original version but it's very good written. I like it :D

keep up the good work !!