this is an awesome story, please continue it!:)

aw i want to read more. and lol im mexican too. but im too white so when im with my family i look adopted.lol

I guess my only quarrel with this is that it is lacking quotes for its speech.

That, and the lack of description and detail is crippling.

As the top of a bottle of pop would say...

'Try Again :('

Great!will there be another story?

Can't wait to read the rest

will you update soon pleaz!^-^

That was really good. I must say, the hardest thing to read is the idea of those two separating...but you nailed the truth...that they NEVER will seperate. Mac and Bloo are forever. :)

yay new story happy happy update soon

Wow, you know, I have to admit that this is a good start for your fanfic. Everyone seems to be in character as well, so nice job with that. I was a bit worried at first because I thought that Bloo was going to have to be given up for adoption at first, but he gets to stay! Yay! XP And poor Madame Foster. It's a shame that she has died. I guess that things happen as time goes by, though. So sad. :(

There is only one thing that I think could use work, though, and that is when people are speaking. When a character is speaking, the words should be quoted instead of hyphenated. For example:

Instead of this: (-What! – Mac and Frankie yelled at the same time.)

It should be like this: ("What!" Mac and Frankie yelled at the same time.)

That's the only thing I thought could've used some work, though. If this is your kind of writing style, though, I'm really sorry for bringing it up. It's just that I had trouble telling who was speaking at times because of the way you typed it in. But still, I think this story has a lot of potential and I look forward to the next update! *adds to alerts*