So yeah, this isn't too bad. Actually, it's pretty good. I really like the plot idea. It's original :D But you have a few small errors in there(a few grammar issues, and it's kind of hard to tell what's going on- no paragraph breaks) I can't wait to see what happens next :D

this sounds like I don't like the story D: but I do, I actually think it's really good ;DD

Awww, I so want a Demy/Axel! xD

Great story so far!

This is a wonderful story, I hope you continue it! _

Like the whole gang thing. very cool.

Keep writing!

Love NarutoxSasuke. too cute!

i love this story...but i hate areith...namines ok he he he anyways update soon

XD This sounds fun! Please update soon! I can't wait to see where you go with this!

-_- it was short! i love it though and can't wait to read more... uh, good start and nice job introducing everybody... good oc's! they work well!