Bwah-ha-ha! Nice tempo and a some great music choices. *Snif* I really miss some of those guys, thanks for the trip down memory lane.
The moment with Maya and Jack was especially touching, it's nice to see the tough guy be a dad occasionally.

This is very good. Very vivid imagery you have working in this story. I hope you update this soon...

That was really cool. It was very original and I enjoyed reading this!

I loved this. It's so nice seeing our favorite characters getting a bit of peace. (The set-up reminds me of an RPG I'm in.)

And great use of a song. That's one I've always associated with "24"!

--Bridget
birdseyeview @ livejournal

Wow, I love it. It's original, interesting, and clever. I look forward to the rest of the series.

wow, that was realy intersting. i look forward to the rest in the series. i am glad that as far as jack knows it was just a dream!

my favorite line:
"He spotted Nina Myers at the bar, having a drink with Walt Cummings and Sherry Palmer. "

the visual on that was just perfect!

Oh man. That was so cool. Very original, fresh, I just loved it. It's perfect as a one-shot but I kinda wish I could read Jack's escape from you. Oh well, think about it, will you? ;-)