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| nightrobin05 2008-08-30 ch 3, anon. | abusecool story but how come none of the students noticed logan (harry) has the same name as logan? |
| DragonFire Princess 2008-07-21 ch 3,  | abuselove the story, hope you update asap! |
| noone314 2008-06-07 ch 3, | abuseHey, I would love to hear more of your story! |
| crystalgirlalways 2008-04-11 ch 3, | abuseare you going to do a flaschback on how Harry or Logan 'scott' got his new powers, that maybe helpful to understand his currect sistuation. just an idea, but anyways still i think your story is going to be very good. i cant wait till the next chapter is up. hopefully that'll be soon. |
| moasan 2007-09-20 ch 3, | abuseoh come on longer chapters please cause i just start to enjoy this |
| Olaf74 2007-05-30 ch 3, | abuseBrilliant. Absolutely Brilliant. Please continue it very soon! |
| AquaRias 2007-01-01 ch 3, | abuseNice story! Update as soon as you can, I'm eager to know what happens next! |
| matealeen 2006-12-14 ch 3, | abuseinteresting so far :) |
| Anna Evans 2006-11-16 ch 3, | abuseUpdate! |
| Brilliance of the Moon 2006-11-07 ch 3, | abuseIs Scott Harry? Update soon, this is interesting. |
| crazysquirl 2006-11-04 ch 3, | abusehahahhahahahahaha. i love it. update soon, plz? |
| amac1688 2006-10-15 ch 3, | abuseinteresting stuff |
| seeker of song 2006-10-12 ch 3, | abuseHey i really enjoyed your story so far. I'm really interested in it and am REALLY tired right now so i'll keep this short and say KEEP typing. Seeker of Song |
| Henshi-anichan 2006-10-11 ch 3, | abuseOkay, now not to be mean or aything, but seriously: "telepathy, telekinesis, rapid healing, adamentium skeleton and claws, shapeshifting, control over weather, creation and manipulation of ice and fire, optic lasers, minor parasitic powers, ability to walk through walls, and, of course, magic" What is he, a god? I'm sorry to say this, but you've made him -way- too powerful. Your story have cougth my interest, but only just, and so I ask you to please consider this: It is -very- hard for a story to be good if the hero too strong. I'm all letting him have great potential, or more powerful than most, but he -must- have weaknesses, or the story looses all depth. Mt advise is to choose -one- power, or at the very least, no more than two. A decent mutation in addition to his magic should make him more powerful than most, and if his power is something he can learn to integrate with his magic, even better. But for gods sake, once you've given him -all- the cool power, it's just not cool anymore. It leaves no room for character development. Please consider what I've said. This is not a flame, merely constructive critisism. Evaluate your own story, but keep writing, and let me see the result. I look forward to it. |
| Keepsake16 2006-10-10 ch 3, | abuseok loved it update sooner please i know it might be hard when you have volleyball babysitting and having your pc time cut short could be a drag but try to write when you can please and try making it longer please update but don't type really quick so you can update sooner or make it longer I just want to know that you are working on it when you can |