I realized that I forgot to review this story. I think I was too MOVED when I finished to think about anything else but how awful I was feeling for everyone.

Even though I knew what would happen (or had a pretty good idea) because I read COTC already, it was stunning. Absolutely stunning. I can't decide which story is better: this or COTC. They are both astounding.

You are an amazing author and I eagerly await whatever else you write. To ease my pain while I wait, I will take a peek at "His Fool." No doubt that will be genius as well. ;)

I can't call this a happy story, but it is so wonderfully written that I've loved reading it anyway. Thanks for writing. x

I finally got around to leaving you a review, Tasty, although by the looks of it I won't be alone. Over 1,0 review? That's staggering!

This is impressive, massive, and...well, all words that involve ginormity. You're just a fabulous writer, and I love how bittersweet it all was. Most of all, the reader, much like Saedra, has no idea how devastating the end will be. I love that most of all, actually.

Great work, and I hope you have more in store after Nightmare!

This chapter made me appreciate the Peter/Saedra pairing more. People *can* fall in love after marriage, and I'm glad Saedra has let go of her pride to give Peter a second chance. As for the chapters before this, you wrote the effects of Saedra being almost raped very well. It was great character development on her part, and the fact that she liked to be in control helped me understand her character more.

-I

I liked how you presented the idea of adultery as being so wrong and unappealingly so, though enjoyable simultaneously ;).
Edmund's reason as to why he didn't say anything before Saedra married Peter made me, as a reader, very frustrated. I mean, it wasn't unexpected, but damn Edmund and his stupid selflessness...

-I

I don't exactly know what to say about this chapter except, well, that it was awesome. That, and I am most definitely on Team Edmund. I was hoping something would happen between Peter and Saedra when they ended up sleeping in the same room, but Saedra's realization that Edmund reciprocated her feelings pretty much an end to that ;).
You write Edmund in love very well. Though it's somewhat of a stretch to believe that he would fall in love with his brother's wife, you still manage to keep him very IC :)

-I

That was absolutely devastating to read. No wonder this is a tragedy. Even so, I loved the ending lines, where you described her love for Edmund and the mistake she'd made in marrying Peter. It was extremely well-written and had a mind-blowing effect on the reader. This is different from COTC in the fact that COTC is an adventure story with a lot of irony, but this is more of a court/historical-esque drama and definitely one of the best ones I've read.

-I

The last chapter (when Saedra and Peter are engaged) was absolute torture to read. Maybe it's because I know how the story is going to end (having read COTC) but it's also because I've always preferred Edmund to Peter. I always found Peter dull (in his perfection) while Edmund was more flawed and interesting. That's why I want Saedra and Edmund to get together, and not behind Peter's back (though I know that's going to happen)...

I also found the Susan/Peridan mention in the end very appealing. It makes sense that Susan would fall for someone like Peridan after the whole Rabadash fiasco.

I've never really liked Golden Age stories that much but this is the most amazing, well-plotted drama I have ever read. I really hope you update on COTC soon ;). Meanwhile I'll finish the rest of HKDS to entertain myself.

-I

“Then it’s a pity you can’t go down to Tashbaan to see her."
Haha I love Saedra. I also really like your characterization of Susan in front of the Calormenes; as for the Calormenes, I think you've got them just right. It must have been hard to come up with all those lines, but you managed it perfectly :)

-I

That was very entertaining to read. Saedra is a great character so far--she's very authentic, as compared to almost all of the other OCs I've come across in the fandom. This may be a romance story, but she doesn't exist only for Peter, which is good :) I don't like Golden Age stories that much but this one is clearly an exception.

-I

I had to stop reading this fic/skip over some parts. Peter is by far my favorite Narnia character followed by Susan. I despise cheating and Peter should of been more hurt/angry at the whore he calls a wife & bitch he calls a brother. No happy ending for Peter? You should write a sequel or something to at least give Peter a happy ending and make Edmund die a horrible death.

og! amazing! ig u changed the locations and the narnia stuff this could have publishing potential! LOve it! HATE PETER!!so musch

*gasp* that bitch!she doesn't even want the to marry that prince and yet she's willing to steal someone's potential true love from someone else! I DON'T LIKE HER! yet

*dramatically whips forehead* All done, finally. This was a very, VERY good story, and refreshingly unique. Though I can't picture Ed doing anything like this, at all, or anything, but you still made it seem very in-character. Good job with that XD.

Hmm... I particularly liked the final two chapters, no idea why, but I did. You wrote Peter and Lucy's reactions to the news very well, I can see them reacting like that. Now I am curious, who does Saedra REALLY love? I think (but am not sure, since I'm not the author) that she really loves Peter, and only... lusts (?) after Ed.

What else... what else; which brother loves Sae more? In this case I think Ed does, but Peter still does love her.

Oh, just thought of something, I also liked the reason you had for why Susan didn't want to marry Rabadash...

This story was full of twists and turns, which I LOVE, so good job with that. All in all, a very nice story. Good job =)

Do you have any idea how hard this end part was to read while listening to Irish sing Fields of Gold on youtube?! Oh, the agony! I almost started crying, and now I have a feeling that I'll be all mopey for the rest of the day. My hands are shaking and ...
If you weren't such a great author...=]
(I appluade you for coming up with all of this; I wouldn't have had the patience for it!)