wow! It's really good! Keep it up!!

^^

Your getting better! Maybe a little more description of the area. By the way, I just noticed on your profile (Zutara forever). Isn't it ridiculous? You proclaim Zuko and Katara lovers yet Zeela wants to kill Katara and kidnap Zuko! We are such an odd bunch aren't we?
-Tierastriel

It's getting better, my only thing is that you started almost every sentence with "She" or another noun, which makes for somewhat of a flat writing style.

You could try instead of:

"She silently slipped between two gears and climbed up a pole."
"Silently slipping between two gears, Xia climbed up a pole."

It makes for a little more variety. Just tryin' to help. Good luck!

That was interesting...

I agree with the second review. The sentences are a bit short, and more descriptive details need to be added.

Also, I would try separating it into multiple paragraphs and double spacing between them.

One other thing I would caution you on is to not make this a Mary-Sue, as it might be turning into one. Your character has "every power" imaginable. You need to give her some flaws, some weaknesses, etc. Just don't Mary-Sue on us, and you should be fine.

Good job Xia! Personally, I'm hearing kind of like in the very begining of LotR, where the voice is talking about the war of the ring many centuries ago thingy. DOn't let others keep you from continuing!
-Tierastriel

Interesting.I think you could make it a story. You can write about how to fight along with the Teen Titans, how to fight against Slade et cetera.
Good luck!^_^

I think that you maybe should put "OC" (original character) in the summary, as Slade does have a daughter in the comics, and people may believe this is about her. Also, an "AU" (alternate universe) as you have a mention of the character being Robin's friend.

The sentences are very short. The story is only one large paragraph. You might expand on some things, if you plan on continuing. One thing being, the character itself. What are her flaws, appearance, etc.

Good luck with your writing.