Oh, is there some more to your story. This is the second time and I like it. You knew how to keep Dakki-sama in character. (Fact is, she's my beloved character in Houshin Engi. n_n) This is a great story and if you continue this one, I'll be that much happier. Yay, Dakki-sama!! *o*

i REALLY wish that you'll continue someday

Wow this is very good and muh first fanfiction story about Hoshin Engi...I like this alot and hope that u would update sometime. And is this Taikoubou/Dakki relationship?

OMG!!! That was soooo good!!! Your writing skills are amazing; you describe Taikoubou-chan's and Dakki-chan's thoughts so well! Great fic! And of my two fav HE characters too! ^_^

Great Taikoubou and Dakki encounter fic!! Since you write so good, could you write a Kibi/Kijin fic on how they relate and feel for each other as Kibi saved Kijin from being turned into nothing but broken biwa pieces as they make their way to Konron 2? Non yuri. Their sister-sister relationship. Could you include a dialogue as they make their way to Konron 2? Domo arigato gozaima a!

Hmm... first the good. Melikes this mostly because it's hard to get into the minds of both Dakki and Taikoubou. I'm glad for the attempt; I think Taikoubou did have the plan at least a little in advance, rather than a spur of the moment, hell, I'll just throw something at her way, but still. The less than good... hrm. There's a problem with the tenses, they don't match. Considering the way it is, I'd recommend converting it all to past tense. And this line is amusing: "His interesting turban liked him to that of a small animal, and gave rise to delectable images in her mind." I think you mean "likened", for a moment I was going... "His turban likes him? O.o;" Heavy use of the metaphor and simile--since you're painting a mood, fine, but some of them are a bit hard to relate to, so maybe keep an eye on them. Oh, and I'd put a mention that you're using V as a heart in the foreward (I'm much more used to seeing

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This is ... more serious than the Tai that shi usually 'sees' while writing. Probably because shi tends to see everything in HE from Fuugen's point of view and ... well, you know the saying about what familiarity breeds. But it's GOOD. VERY VERY GOOD. Prods shi to remember that while Tai does act the bumbling doushi, there's a very serious and dedicated leader under the facade.

Wow, this is quite good. Language is good, elaborate use of vocabulary, characters are portrayed well (you make Bou-chan sound SO kickass!! Waiiii!! ^__^), NO grammatical errors and NO spelling errors (oh thank the lord!!) *cries with joy* (yes, everyone should know by now, I'm really fussy with grammar and spelling). Brilliant!! Keep writing!! ^^

The start of this confused me a little with some of the jumps between the different thought clusters, but I'm easily confused so you probably shouldn't sweat it. You write Tai very well; I really liked the last half of it and his thoughts on the entire situation. I also liked how you had some of it from Dakki's POV and I imagine she was probably difficult to write o_O Darn kitsune.... Very cool work, hope to see more stuff by you!