I'm glad you continued. So, what exactly is the significance of the brooch? Is this the end or are you continuing? It seems there's a lot more story to be told! Continue!

Haha. The bird is going to get better treatment.

Long chapter to read, but still interesting. The scroll bar isn't too long, but the paragraphs are. I have no complaints about Jack, you're doing him fine and I also love Jack/Johnny. He seems like a version of Will, except that he seems even more innocent and naive. To hook readers, the only thing that I might suggest are to put in more dialogue and a little less detail, since some people might not like it. But I'm still a fan. Onto the next chapter.

I am in love with the Jack that you have presented to me. :)

After reading so many fics with Mary-Sues (including my own borderline Sue character, unfortunately), I'm really really glad that I found this one. Ah, so you read my profile. Yup, my criteria for the perfect fic. And it looks like I've found it.

Excellent chapter. I love the way you write Jack's dialogue - "Wishing ye hadn't served him such a scurvy turn, maybe. Or wishing you'd cottoned on to a good thing when ye had it?" That sounds just like Jack.

So, what is Jack's plan? "But he had reasons of his own for wanting her safely on her road" - what reasons? And maybe I'm just dense, but exactly how did he know her back in London? Does she remember him?

PLease update soon!

This is absolutely wonderful. I haven't seen writing like this in a very long time. I'd leave a longer review, except I have to go grocery shopping now. But don't worry, as soon as I read chapter two, I'll leave a nice long comment. :)

Very interesting! You must update soon! I want to know what Jack is up to, and where he's seen Lily before!

This story is very interesting, well-written, and nicely long. Keep going!

All right, you really must update this soon, savvy? It's a good story, and I'm really enjoying your writing! So update!

Okay, what's up with this bird?

Oh, I am liking this. You truly have a way with words. The whole conversation between Jack and Jack (!) was very entertaining.

"...admiring the spectacle of hard labour from a safe distance." - heh.

And when the boy said "Jack" - "This time he did turn, not so much startled as impressed by the acknowledgment. "Aye, and yours?" - That was great.

This is off to a good start! You write really well, and Jack is very in-character. I think it should be entertaining to see Jack and this Lily matching wits. They are going to encounter each other again, aren't they? Well, I gather from your introduction that you've got this story almost finished, so I hope that means regular updates!

I haven't finished the first chapter yet (I'm printing out the whole story to read before bed) but I thought I'd send out a review a bit early to tell you how much I appreciate the obvious care and effort you've put into the fic. Both Jack and the girl thief come across already as full-bodied characters, rather than cliche caricatures you see alot that seem to focus on one particular facet the author finds most convenient to write. Jack likes his women, yes, but he isn't one to lose his head over one, he is ultimately an independent, self-centered if adorable none the less for it _ rogue, and I guess after sifting through so many dewy-eyed and nauseatingly love-struck Jacks today I just had to make sure you're clued in on just how brilliantly in a few scenes you've represented this character. Had to get that out! Thanks again

This is excellent! Very good Jack. I look forward to the chase.

So, the plot thickens! I like the relationship you're building between Jack and John F., the level of detail, Jack's knowledge of politics, etc. The pacing is really excellent. I will look forward to the next chapter with pleasurable anticipation. Also, will tell my fellow pirates on Live Journal at potc_dogwatch and at Black Pearl Sails. :)

I really like the way this starts out. Jack is very nicely drawn, and the scenario is similar to one I've been toying with for a long time. You're doing a great job of fleshing out the OC's. Wonderful work!