Ah, lovely.

It's fine the way it is, it can be a drabble. A sweet blend of a little humor and seriousness is great, add some nice characterization in, don't make it too long, and thus what you wrote is your result.

Good job, keep it up! :3;;

I'd love if you write more too, especially of Phibrizo.

Yeah, it was a little short. =) It's okay to make first and last chapters short though. They're only used to set up plot and wrap up loose ends anyway. It was a good teaser. The Phibrizzo thing has been done, but I loved how you kept him so well in character. He's not really silly like some authors write him. You kept him... maniacal and playfully dark. I would recommend making future chapters longer, but other than that, I can say my curiosity is sparked to see where you take the story. ^^

You're really at it. Icons and fafiction. Anyway this was ery good. I liked how you wrote Hellmaster's thinking using cards. Smart. Write more soon!

well...you have already made a humour fic, maybe you should try doing a serious fic

You did great on this first part! It added to my evening of endless laughing to picture Phibrizzo playing Go Fish! with that poor little kid's soul. I can see him slowly working his way through half the population of Sairaag this way.

Oh, I like it. Yay for card analogies! ^-^ I think for these kind of one-shot-ish-themed fics a blend of humor and seriousness is good. But either way you should write more!