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| Mishelle20 2006-11-27 ch 2,  | abuseThis is a cute story so far, I would love to read more. |
| sheltie 2006-11-13 ch 2, | abusevery cute fis so far hurry an update |
| LtCol Carter 2006-09-16 ch 2, | abuseSo, are you going to continue with this? I'm really liking it! the interaction between Mac and Lindsay seems really in-character so far... please go on. Sam :) |
| Alexandra Warkel 2006-07-30 ch 2, | abuseupdate soon! |
| MeredithandDerekfanforever 2006-07-02 ch 2, | abuseI love this story and can't wait to read more. Please post more soon. Brandy |
| jeffandjimmieschick 2006-06-27 ch 2, | abuseplease update this story, it seems like it's really starting to get good. i would really like to see mac open up to lindsay and vice versa. great job on doing this story so far. keep it up! |
| dark rolling sea 2006-06-27 ch 2, | abuseHey! Good chapter. It was well written and nicely displayed. I did notice your transitions are a bit choppy. When you switch from Mac/Lindsay to the rest and then after Mac comes out there is no transition. I had to read it twice to get what was going on. Remember you don't want to reader to strain to hard, it should be clear cut and expressive. Otherwise it was well done and I enjoyed it. Nice work and awaiting chapter 3. dark rolling sea :-) |
| chili-peppers 2006-06-27 ch 2, | abuseahh this is soo sweet and funny the same time danny stella and flack are so funyn together and lindsey and mac are great together i love this cant wait for more well done |
| Maijajo 2006-06-27 ch 2, | abuseOh, these two are cute! Love this story so far. Keep up the good work ... |
| Dybdahl 2006-06-27 ch 1, | abusei like the teams reaction to mac behaving like a total **, now have Lindsay kiss it better. |
| dark rolling sea 2006-06-26 ch 1, | abuseGreat Start here! You have captured the reader's attention with the explosive almost violent start to the story with Mac's 'tantrum'. It was clearly written and had excellent flow. I think your characters are on for now. One minor error..."to turn and leave when the door sprung violently open in font of her and Mac appeared" I think font should be front... Otherwise I didn't see anything wrong with your structure and you painted the picture nicely for the reader. Great start and awaiting chapter 2. dark rolling sea. PS...I notice you said no flaming in your author notes. Just remember that you can't please everyone and they are just expressing their sole opinion. Take good and bad reviews in stride. If you want to make it as a writer you have to learn to deal with 'rejection'...cheers. |
| Maijajo 2006-06-26 ch 1, | abuseLove it! Love that everyone's pushing Lindsay to talk to Mac, and the new girl with the fresh sheen still on her. Great job. |
| fruitbat00 2006-06-26 ch 1, | abuseWell youv'e got me interested...*g* I want to know whats goin on with my fav CSI. Nice start. Angry Mac is a scary thing no wonder Linsay is nervous. One thing to remember Flack doesnt work for Mac he's Homicide not CSI. |
| chili-peppers 2006-06-26 ch 1, | abuseOhh !! wow this is briliant so far!! i love it cant wait for you to update!! well done this rocks!! |
| Axellia 2006-06-26 ch 1, | abuseInteresting start. I love Danny's work being commented on for being child-like. for some reason, it wouldn't surprise me. Boo to Mac for being such a meanie around Christmas - I'm curious as to what Lindsay will be able to get out of him! Good work. |