Wow. Just plain Wow. This is a good well written story.. i just hope you didnt abandon it... Hope to see u review! agian WOw it was really good

I love this story! It was so well written, and very, very interesting! I can't wait to read the next chapter. Please update soon!!

OMG, why did it take me so long to find this story? I've spent all night reading this and I really hope you haven't given up on it. And wow, this chapter was sizzling, it's about time they did the deed. I am putting this on my favorites and will be keeping my fingers crossed for updates, and even better, a sequel. There are so few good Harry/Cedric stories, I'm always looking for more of them. Please keep writing!

This is a really is a good harry and cedric story please keep going with it.

cool chapter
i hope Credic doesn't die

Bloody awesome story! Not enough good Harry/Cedric fics, but this is one of my top fics! Keep up the great work!

Chloe

Cedric the seagull!!That made me giggle.

OMG! i LOVE it! i laughed alot. idk if you ment for some of it to be really funny, but thats how i tool it ^-^ uuh, it totally reminded me about consent laws. so annoying, but i mean, at the same time its good that they're there.

any whoo, loved the story can't wait for an update!
Iri

Ohh! I can't wait for the next chapter! I simply adore the story! It's the first Cedric/Harry fic, I've read and it's so good!

keep goin! i like it!

I've spent quite some time reading this chapter, and my impressions have changed dramatically. I did quite some nitpicking here, most of which I decided were just too petty. There might still be too much (I fear I'm being too poetical). All in all, I think this chapter was average, perhaps a smidgen below: there were places were the flow wasn't so good. There were good and bad points, but nothing impressive in either direction. Perhaps I've just read this too closely, and am now seeing all the little bugs that never affect mundane life. Anyways, let's get on with this.

I was a bit disappointed when the spell wasn't named. It could've been... inventive ;)

No friction?! Surely you are exaggerating. Just thinking of the ease and speed -- it's comical: the wet-soap-flies-out-your-hand kind (actually, that doesn't even begin to compare).

The ice cream humor was what I'd been expecting the whole time. Good one.

The first love-making is quite good. The next two... well they did this and they felt that: that about sums it up. It lacks color and emotion until "For a while they wavered there". I'm not sure what the scenes are doing there: another trophy like "individual anarchist"?

The "big cat mating" simile is empty and vague to me. It's too general, probably: be more specific with metaphors and similes. "growled like a lion" is most likely very traditional/cliché, but it has vastly more color.

Dumbledore pwns. There isn't really anything else to say.

Random pettifogging:
"tranquility of the environment": I use this as an example of a general tendency among writers of just stating the emotion, instead of writing it (there are other instances, eg. the sex scenes 2,3). Images, rhythm and words color bring life to the text. You can find those things in "For a while they wavered there": rhythm (minor thing), sounds ("they wavered there") and color ("waver").

"She led him to a tranquil place in hopes of placating him."
cf.
"She led him through the woods, to a glade where a bright brook rippled into a pristine pond. The sunlight penetrated the canopy in small rays, lighting verdant patches of hay and grass. She had come here often during her Hogwarts days to escape the hectic student life. Now she hoped that it would placate her husband."

(Bear in mind this is just nitpicking. I might be too strict on that particular point. But the principle holds.)

Agitated Cedric uses 'Dad'; he could use 'Father'... depends on how close one'd like them to sound in "No, Dad, those days are over,". Perhaps you knowingly chose Dad, in which case I have no right to pester you about it.

Amos and Penelope's discussion is once again quite one-sided, like the Dumbledore-Cedric conversation. The circumstances are extenuating, though, and I can imagine the conversation progressing as it does. Amos's agitation isn't expressed very solidly; stronger words could the remedy (there are so few of them, though, so you don't need to bother necessarily). I've been re-reading Penelope's revelations, and I've some to the conclusion that you've managed quite well in creating a sharp, stern tone for her words. Congrats. There are some clutter words (perhaps most notably the "or some like that", which mollifies the end) which could be rethought, if you so desire (eg. "Anyway,"). Succinct and short are the keywords for upset preaching.

Typos:
"When the exited murmur" --> excited
"Nobody would believe a fourteen-year-old to seduce a seventeen-year-old" --> "fourteen-year-old could/to have seduce(d)"
"as you could ever had hoped for." --> have

I agree with other reviewers about the rotten place to stop, or at least it would've eased my curiosity to have the next chapter ready. Technically, it was the right place to stop. Don't hurry with it, though, if it makes it better -- but if it makes you lazy, be sure that Kreacher will be knocking on your door! ;)

OMG!! what a cliffhanger man!
harry and cedric are so cute together.
I have greatly enjoyed this story so far, can't wait til the next chapter

Great chapter I loved it all but that was a rotten place to stop. Please update fast!

This goes out to ALL the HATERS in the land: Takeo is better than you ever have been, currently are, and most likely will be, so lay off. Thank you for your kind attention :) .

Oh yeah... your version is SO much better lol. I absolutely love how you took what i mentioned and turned it into something totally above and beyond what I could have imagined, exquisite by all definitions. This would be why YOU are the writer and I am the reader haha. Excellent work as always :D .

~Raven

NO! I WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS!